D.W.B. - ID# 435

Waubonsie Valley

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

DWB: Driving While Black is a visual poem describing society's flaws in equality and a motivation for change.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/28 2:26 am - I really like what you have done with this piece. Thematically and stylistically this piece stands out; it challenges and entertains the viewer in a manner that distinguishes it from the others in this category. Would this piece fit better in a different category? In its current shape, it does not conform to traditional narrative conventions. For example, does the central conflict build to a climactic moment as the piece progresses? Does the story possess any type of resolution?
• 3/7 9:04 am - Intro too long. Nice cameo.
• 3/4 1:50 pm - A powerful topic. Some really cool visuals and lighting. At times, this seems a bit slow—the pace of the video does not seem to match the apparent urgency of the topic. Near the end there is some good, quick editing that shows some energy as it matches pacing with the reading. The :45 opening seemed too long and not wholly necessary.

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