Fred Swanson and the Golden Football - ID# 484

Franklin High School

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

A high school twist to a comedy classic.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 2/28 3:09 pm - For me, your strength here is your image quality and your audio editing. I don’t know what you shot this on, but it looks and sounds good. Crisp image, good colors, good audio levels, sweetening, etc. Having said that, aside from interesting shots at the top (where you should have used a tripod), you settled into a somewhat repetitious shot pattern of looking up at the nerd and down at the jocks. I like Monty Python too, but this was a fairly weak derivative of Holy Grail. Overall, I found your credits more interesting than your story. So, I’d encourage you to take what appear to be pretty solid skills and apply them toward a more worthy story. I hope you got your extra credit because I don’t think you’re going to be bringing home any hardware with this particular entry. Keep at it though. I bet Monty Python got a lot of negative feedback when they were starting out, and now all those critics look like idiots.

Judge 1

Positives: I liked the closing credits. They were a lot of fun. Nice clear dialog audio.

Improvements: The ambient noise was a bit overpowering. The lighting was very uneven.

Judge 2

Positives: Kudos to you for making a pretty out-there piece. There was definitely something cool about what you were going after. Loved the spirit of the end credits. Super fun.

Improvements: The title of the short was super cool -- just wished it paid the story off. Was super confused by what everyone wanted.

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