Poms Color Run - ID# 500

Franklin High School
News Package
Entry Description

Franklin girls poms hold a successful color run fundraiser.

Recent Teacher Comments

  • 4/24 11:02 am - As others have stated, you have a great video here, though it felt like it could be longer or more descriptive. Overall, the audio and B-Roll are fantastic and I commend you on getting such a variety of shots before, during, and after the race. Great effort! My one concrete suggestion is to look at your ending as a final image and sound to leave the viewer with when your video goes to black. What image and sound should they walk away with so the video resonates and sticks with them and so the message is clear? In your case, I feel the ending is too abrupt and ends without a clear image and sound. Keep up the great work!
  • 3/5 1:11 pm - Nicely put together piece. Interviewees should not hold the mic. B-roll audio a little high, so it competes with the voices. Piece just ended. I was expecting a little more.
  • 2/27 11:33 am - I think the video in this story was excellent. I felt very close to the piece based on your choices. You never really answered the why question to this story (why are they doing all of this). I do also like the audio in this piece. Be careful of the interviews holding their own microphone. I would've liked to see this be a longer video.
Judge 1

Positives: - Fun story! Good use of natural sound. - This is well shot. The variety of pictures helps the story flow and puts me right there with the fun and excitement.

Improvements: - It would be nice to hear more about how the fundraiser helps the poms team. The only mention is that money goes toward costumes. - Never start a story like this with "last month" or any reference to the past. I want to know the "now." For example, "the girls pom team is full of a colorful spirit." Then get into the fact that the fundraiser was last month. I wouldn't make the first two words "last month."

Judge 2

Positives: nice job iwth the beginning- strong opening using broll and nat sots! fun, active piece. did a great job with broll and action!

Improvements: would love to have seen a little more finessing at the end.

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