Teagan's School - ID# 514

Lake Forest

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

The personal story of growing into a teacher

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/28 7:13 am - This piece is beautifully shot and carefully edited. The way in which moving shots are juxtaposed and the patterns created by these movements give the piece an effective rhythm/pacing. Your project challenges the definition of this category. Conflict and character development are not treated in the same manner as they are in most of the other pieces in the narrative category. How might you have restructured this story to allow the central conflict to build to a more dramatic climax? Similarly, what obstacles could your protagonist encounter over the course of her journey? These obstacles would allow the viewer to observe the protagonist react to challenging situations and create additional interest to the story's plot.
• 3/7 9:05 am - Nice use of props.

Judge 1

Positives: Great message with this story. I like the way that you show the growth of the little girl into a teacher. I thought that the look back was realistic, and the conversations felt natural. The editing is well done, and offers a solid pace to this story.

Improvements: Be carful with the audio. At times it is a little distracting. I understand that there is a transition in voices, but it does take away from the message a little when it is during a serious period of the piece. The B-roll after the cemetery is a little confusing as to what is going on at first,

Judge 2

Positives: Cinematography is excellent overall- lighting, composition, movement- well thought-out and excuted.

Improvements: I'd only describe this as a Dramatic Narrative in the broadest sense of the word. It feels like a personal statement video- almost like a PSA.

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