Green School Initiative - ID# 516

Highland Park

News Package

Entry Description

An "HP Minute . . . or Two" featuring our school's Green School Initiative club.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/5 1:57 pm - This piece could have been stronger if it was edited down. There was a bunch of extra fluff that the reporter added. Instead of saying that you sat down with Mr. So and So who does this about something. Go right into it. Your lower third should tell us who he is,what he does, and his interview should tell us what it is about. Interviews are inconstant. Some interviewees hold the mic (which they shouldn't), some show part of the interviewer, some show more of the interviewer. Text should have an outline around it so that you can read it better. Why did you pick this place to do your stand-up? Does not go with story. Reporter sounds like he is reading. So, I guess Elyssa doesn't add anything to how the school is being environmentally responsible? Not according to your closing. Some white balance and iris issues in some shots.
• 2/27 11:38 am - This was a good idea to profile this club. The main problem is the entire voice track is the reporter standing in a random hallways for seemingly no reason. Some of the other reporter narration tracks weren't really informational (just transitional...he said this, now she is about to say this). There appeared to be a shot staged in this story.

Judge 1

Positives: the natural way you interviewed your subjects was refreshing. The piece had a casual and engaging feel with the beginning involvement of multiple people responding to the question. Great job posing a question and involving your audience in the discovery of the audience with a call to action at end.

Improvements: Lighting is tough when you are changing locations. give yourself a little more time to light your subject. Would have loved to see some more shots of broll to further demonstrate the story visually.

Judge 2

Positives: Good Story with good, useful information.

Improvements: Mascot in background detracted from opening standup. Also, why are there credits in the open of the piece? In a 2-minute segment, if you want credits, put them at the end so viewers can focus on your message until the piece is over. Will seems to be telling the story and interviews Elyssa using a hand mic. Then, a few frames later, Elyssa is talking,holding the same mic. A bit confusing. Try more active b-roll.

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