Learn while you Worm! - ID# 564
Southland College Prep
News Package
Entry Description
First time for everything.
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/24 10:50 am - As others have noted, your camera movement can be distracting. A rule of thumb is to stay focused on an object for 5 to 10 seconds, no camera movement or zooming. You can then move images closer or pan in post, making for a more fluid look. As for pans, the rule I follow is 7 seconds on a singular object, not counting time for starting and stopping the pan (when the movement is usually not as fluid and more jerky). Great job obtaining so many interviews, you definitely were able to show the story through others rather than you telling it. Keep up the great work!
- 3/5 12:28 pm - Too much camera movement. Did the reporter record her part in the quiet part of the library? Sounds like she is trying to be quiet, which does not make her strong. Audio could use some work. Some talking only coming out of the left channel. Were you using a mic or the one in the camera? There is too much background noise, so if you did use an external mic, you need to work on the placement. Do you have a school policy that says that you can't identify the students? Cover up edits with b-roll. You use a wipe and then go right to b-roll. Start the b-roll earlier. Wipes are really not used in news stories. They are used to hide something. I'm not sure if you should be using music in this piece. It's a news story, not a corporate video promoting the program. Good story and some good shots.
- 2/27 11:28 am - Cool story idea and I did learn a few things. The video was moving too much. It looked like you surprised this class and did a bunch of walking around b-roll. There was too much audio in the background. There was music in the background that was too loud. Be careful with your transitions between parts. The narrator could have a more powerful voice track.
Judge 1
Positives: - The music is cute. - Your opening lines are well-written. (Your voice just needs much more kick. See below.)
Improvements: - Work to bring more volume and energy to your narration. - The piece feels a little bogged down with too many sound bites. Some of those sound bites can be paraphrased by you and turned into a few lines of compelling narration.
Judge 2
Positives: great job setting the tone with the music loved the engaging set up- good job with the interviews.
Improvements: liked that you experimented with different transition elements, but sometimes those can be distracting from the actual story audio is hard to hear because of the background noise. Isolating the channel may help or settin gup your interviews in a quieter setting
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