MMEA Fest

What is life all about and where do I fit in.

4/28 1:21 am - Your story certainly highlights pressures individuals experience at this point in their lives. When writing future narratives, consider how you might expand the central conflict as the story progresses. Let this conflict build in its intensity prior to the story's climax. Similarly, pay careful attention to your protagonist's growth. Your viewer should be able to see distinct changes in the boy as a result of his encounter with the story's central conflict.
3/7 9:04 am - Short and to the point.
3/4 1:24 pm - Some cool editing to match the pace and anxious nature of the script. Music might help increase the tension here. When it ends, and he calls it a “nightmare,” it seems extreme given what we have seen and heard. Yes, he is stressed, but I’m not sure we have really seen a “nightmare” of “reality.” Seems like we would need more intensity in shots or situations to show that. Other than stress, the character seems to have a pretty comfortable life.

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