False Confidence - ID# 597

Maine East

Seven Day Challenge

Entry Description

Zain is a high school student down on his luck. Under pressure, he hires a life coach to help him turn things around. Will he succeed? Music courtesy of www.bensound.com and www.purple-planet.com.

Recent Teacher Comments

Judge 1

Positives: Your shooting style was very creative and it added a lot to the visual telling of the story. A lot of the shots had quite a bit of depth, where you had something going on in the foreground and the background (for example - the final 2 shots with the girl waving, and Zain behind her out of the window, and then the last shot with the life coach in the foreground and the girl in the background). Overall, these types of shots helped to create the space and relation between characters, and also can be funny to juxtapose 2 different things going on. Your use of music worked really well and fit in with the tone of the piece nicely. It wasn't too loud or crazy or distracting, but still kept a good energy and mood for the scenes when you were using it. Also, it was a smart move to not have music under the entire thing, but instead choosing the right scenes that needed it.

Improvements: I think a lot of your story/dialogue could have been condensed. Some of the scenes felt like they went on for way too long and ended up losing some of their humor. For example, the scene with Zain and his friends sitting in the hallway when they recommend the life coach could have probably been cut in half. Overall, the length of some of the scenes made the piece kind of drag a bit and could've benefitted from cutting it down/increasing the pacing. Some of your editing could have been a little more precise. There were some jumpcuts that could have been matched if they were just adjusted by a few frames. Nothing too distracting but there were a few towards the beginning that were definitely noticeable.

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Judge 3

Positives: Good acting, good humor

Improvements: I don't understand how he "had trouble talking to people" if he had friends he was talking to in the beginning. Makes no sense.

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