Synchronicity - ID# 602

Homewood-Flossmoor

Seven Day Challenge

Entry Description

description: an·guish ˈaNGɡwiSH/ noun severe mental or physical pain or suffering.

Recent Teacher Comments

Judge 1

Positives: I think your editing was strong in helping to create a contrast between the past and the present. The titles felt like they were well paced and kept the piece moving throughout. Your shots, along with the way it was edited, worked well to help us understand the stages of their relationship without being to overt about it. For example, the shot behind them as they wash dishes was really great in doing this.

Improvements: A lot of your shots (especially the ones in the car) felt much too dark. I had trouble seeing detail in some of what was going on and I felt as thought it was distracting to me as a viewer. I understand wanting to have shots feel dark, but you need to find the balance of where its dark, but not so dark that your audience is struggling to see what is happening. I was a bit confused by the titles you chose. They feel well placed, and I understand what you were going for, but they felt a little randomly chosen, rather than being super cohesive. I think they made the piece feel like it was left a little bit too ambiguous, and I would've loved a bit more clarification.

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Judge 3

Positives: Good song, good editing, great camera work. all around awesome

Improvements: More action to make up for lack of dialogue. Needs more subtle direction.

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