Teacher's Assistant - ID# 603

York

Seven Day Challenge

Entry Description

A teacher assistant struggles with completing daily tasks of her job while reflecting on her stress from typical high school drama.

Recent Teacher Comments

Judge 1

Positives: The pacing of the editing starting with the little opening title montage was really strong. The transitions between the flashbacks and present time also worked really well to help us understand the stress she was feeling while she was grading. The use sound effects was also incredibly successful from the opening montage. The stapler sound almost became a beat and gave a good rhythm to the piece, as well as other props being used. The sound and editing also worked really well to complement on another - making the cuts and transitions very defined and helped make the piece feel cohesive and polished.

Improvements: The flashback to the convo about Peter could have been cut down a bit. The back and forth dialogue lasted a bit too long and ended up losing some of the tension for me. A short punchy conversation may have worked better here - to also help increase the chaos that the main character is feeling The climax fell a little flat for me. After we've gone through all of these flashbacks and we have the overlapping sounds as she's stapling - I expected the build up to result in something more dramatic or cathartic. Her just getting up and leaving didn't feel like enough of an ending for me. It was too sudden and I wanted to see her have more of a reaction.

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Judge 3

Positives: Great potential in your narrative. Interesting story

Improvements: Incredibly anti-climactic. Nothing happens at the end besides her getting up and walking away. That's not really enough to qualify as a breakdown, nor does it have any sort of payoff for the viewer or character

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