Jonah Davenport: The Peak of Percussion - ID# 87

Glenbrook South

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

A look inside the life of local legend Jonah Davenport, the top triangle player in the North Shore area.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/7 11:02 am - Keep font consistent throughout your piece. Solid job on interview setup. Storyline could have been stronger. Solid lighting job. Solid camera work as well.

Judge 1

Positives: Strong hook. Made me laugh. Loved the turn the story took with the introduction of Rene Pierre. Unexpected and a very dimensional choice. Would've been easy to ride the triangle angle for the entire short and super impressed you did't take the easy way out.

Improvements: Felt the bonding of the two triangle virtuosos was rushed. The same for the ending. Step those two things out a little more and sharpen the humor and this short will be even better. Overall, really enjoyed this one. Bravo!

Judge 2

Positives: Great premise...humor and satire is exactly right and not overdone at all...very well acted...the camp is perfect

Improvements: None

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