Michael In The Car - ID# 123
Crown Point
Division: A
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
Michael's character represents the majority of teen drivers: quiet, antisocial, music-blaring, rude, distracted, and hypocritical.
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/25 11:28 am - Looked great. Not a comedy.
- 3/14 7:33 am - Good idea of turning the hypocrisy into irony. The sound levels help to build frustration in Mike's friend. Your framing is good for the limited space in the car. That light is hard to control in the car, but you had a few shots of each character with sunlight on one side and skylight on the other that looked interesting. The trick is getting the light to be consistent over time, or making time your friend. Some shots looking forward could help make sense of lighting changes and both break up the monotony inherent in the tight inside shots and give us the feeling of time passing as the frustration is building.
- 3/5 1:35 pm - At first, I thought you had horrible audio, but then I realized you were playing with the music intentionally, weaving the rise and fall of the music into your storyline diegetically. Nicely done. That said, I know that a scene in a car is challenging because your camera angles are limited and your lighting can be challenging. However, I feel like your camera shots became repetitive after a while and your shots suffered from poor lighting, especially the passenger’s shot which seemed to have soft focus. Editing pace could also have been improved. We got the point of the music going up and down after the 2nd interaction. After that, it kind of dragged. You could have cut out a minute of this video and gone to the last interaction.
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