Classified - ID# 157
Mundelein
Division: AA
Movie Trailer
Entry Description
Two students found out about one of their grandpas pasts, and go on a journey to figure out more. However there are people who will stop at nothing to make sure the secrets from the past stay in the past.
Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/11 4:07 pm - https://drive.google.com/file/d/1S1aomqxEfbeRdseb8ACfs5C0KEAy2sMW/view?usp=sharing
- 3/1 7:45 pm - Story: In a nutshell, I think the story has too much set up and not enough development. I think you could skip the entire first scene in the school library and just start with the line asking what the grandfather did as a scientist. The reaction is enough for us to follow the whole story. The problem for me is that it doesn’t develop almost at all from there. The kid gets kidnapped, but we don’t know enough to care about finding out why. The dramatic music tries to add suspense, but there’s nothing from a story perspective to make me want to see the movie. Camera: A good variety of shots, generally used effectively. My favorite scene was the shot that circled around the kid to reveal the building. (Unfortunately, there was nothing cool or amazing about the building that made the reveal meaningful.) Lighting: Your lighting could use a bit more attention to detail. I don’t know what you have available but you seemed to use available light except for the shot where he’s being held hostage or whatever. You have some backlighting issues that you could probably avoid with some different staging. Otherwise, bringing in a fill light would help. Sound: Effective use of music. Good track selection, and your levels are decent. I thought your dialogue levels seemed a bit high. Editing: I feel like there are simple ways you could polish this up. A simple fade in at the top would add a touch of professionalism. Even the font and your title cards are opportunities to create mood that I don’t think you take full advantage of. Final thoughts: Just so it gets said, things like locations, casting, etc. all matter. Everything about this looks and feels like a student project. To the extent that you can find more original locations, maybe cast some adults where appropriate, it would help your work feel more legit. But good stuff to build on here. Keep at it.
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