Henry's Matchmaking Dream - ID# 169
Glenbrook South
Division: A
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
A lonely high schooler is out of luck when it comes to the ladies until his friend's father helps him by travelling into his dreams to discover his true match.
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/25 11:05 am - Original story idea. Funny. Angles and composition didn't make sense to me. Story got confusing, edit should have been cleaned up and tightened up.
- 4/24 5:24 pm - Good visual effects once Henry enters the "dream" world. Audio is well done. I liked the use of sound during the fall.
- 3/13 12:47 am - Good idea. And the main character is cast well. He has great facial expressions. The comic aspect depends on his unease as well as the dream snooping premise. The dad is good too. The cut from reality to dream was really effective. Nice use of sound to emphasize that (and the drop in the theater as well). I'm not sure if the camera movement is intentionally loose, but some of the shots are more stable than others. That stability or looseness could have been used to differentiate between reality and the dream sequence, by supporting or subverting the idea that reality is the more stable of the two.
- 3/5 12:58 pm - Interesting concept. I liked the character development, although the set up took a bit longer than I expected. This could be the actual story, or your editing decisions and ultimately your pacing. Camera work was good overall; nice variety of shot compositions and angles. There was a weird part in the early basement scenes where the camera was seeming to shift in and out of focus (0:16 - 0:22). That is kind of a big deal; you should avoid using autofocus for precisely this reason. Lighting was mixed; some of your shots were really well lit and very clearly intentional for the scene, others seemed lacking. The opening shot, for example, was fantastic, with nice soft key lighting, a little bit of back lighting on his head, and then the Christmas lights in the background. The shot of the dad was not lit well enough; his face was mostly in shadow. The basement scenes were lit more dramatically, to simulate a party scenario. But you could definitely have added more colored lights or background practical lights. The blackbox dream scene (3:15 - 4:25) leaves me with mixed feelings about your lighting choices. I understand it was meant to be blackbox or limbo lighting, but the main guy and the waiter both needed more backlighting and key lighting. The dream girl was perfectly backlit and that had a great dramatic effect. Sound was a little bit mixed as well. Most of the audio was acceptable, but you had a few hot spots where your levels were clearly over-modulated. You have to watch your VU meter WHILE you are in production and make sure you leave a little headroom in your audio record settings, to allow for more intense or louder dialogue. Then in post, you have to make adjustments to ensure a clean mix.
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