Perspective - ID# 189
Deerfield
Division: AA
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
Two best friends find out the hard way that in spite of the constant churn of social media, off screen, not all is as it seems.
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/2 11:37 am - Perspective Lighting good Initial scene cut well Shotgun mic in upper right-hand corner around :28 Around 1:15, camera person visible in reflection Too much lead space at 1:25 Wrong facing at 2:20 Music way too dramatic, too loud at times
- 3/11 4:25 pm - Story: The story is clear enough and easy to follow. Although I like the message, it’s delivered in a fairly heavy-handed way. My biggest note about the story is the very end. Why, after her friend finally comes clean about all of her insecurities and problems at home, does the other girl leave in a huff? This would be the place for a big hug and apologies all around. Camera: Most of your basics are okay. But why do you show us the camera and tripod in the reflection in Mr. Brown’s room, not to mention Mr. Brown’s script in his hand. And in the final scene, you crop the girl weirdly and I’m guessing it’s because she was reading off the script as well. Lighting: Basically solid. No big issues here. Sound: Appropriate music tracks. Levels are good. V.O. sounds like V.O. as is adjusted well. Good stuff. Editing: No big red flags here. Final Thoughts: Some good work here, but some clunky errors undermine the overall effectiveness.
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