Eyes in the Shadow - ID# 210

Morton East

Division: AA

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

Comedic Narrative production featuring a student leaving the school library after the end of a long day.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/24 4:17 pm - Music chosen well but then it went out of sync. Nice shots from the animals perspective. Loved the shot in the hallway from the high angle. Really like the choice to use black and white. Using more animals would have been better or sticking with one. Nice end too bad the exposure was not correct. Great work.
• 4/10 10:34 am - You have a great story here with matching dramatic element. The stuffed animals were both ominous and very funny, great work! Moving forward, you have very dramatic music but your editing choices, particularly your cuts, don’t match your music enough and that would heighten both the dramatic elements as well as make this even more visually appealing. Keep at it, you have a nice sense of movement and capturing stylistic shots, you’re going to continue to make great pieces.
• 4/2 11:45 am - Eyes in the Shadow Nice tracking shots Shots well framed overall Good music Pretty funny Cuts could have been quicker Music cut abruptly at the end Random fades to black were a bit sloppy Why is it black and white

Judge 1

Positives: Good camera angles. Well thought out stalking sequence.

Improvements: Some shaky shots early. Keep it on the tripod. Some scenes were too dark and you lost detail.

Judge 2

Positives: Super fun open! Really enjoyed it. The mystery of the strange forms stalking the hero was a lot of fun and kept me engaged. Also enjoyed the humor of how and when the stuffed demons appeared, especially the drinking fountain reveal. Loved the score! Nicely timed.

Improvements: First, a caveat - making a short is never easy. I applaud you for diving in. As far as criticism goes,I would've liked a little more story and a stronger ending to your story. It goes a little flat in the middle and without a twist (surprise) at the end, it's not as satisfying as I was hoping. If filmmaking is your passion, I encourage you to challenge yourself to always surprise your audience. Ideally, that surprise comes in the end but in reality, you should be thinking about it in every scene. It's clear that you did when thinking about how to reveal the omni present evil stuffies. Keep at it!

Judge 3

Positives: The noir style worked well and the music accentuated the actions nicely

Improvements: Slow at the beginning--lacked focus and direction until fountain scene....audio jump cut at end scene when music stopped needed something there

Judge 4

Positives:

Improvements: