Aspergers PSA - ID# 227

Glenbrook South
Division: A
Public Service Announcement
Entry Description

A PSA depicting a true event that happened to my brother, Kiaro. I created this to foster an understanding and acceptance of those with Asperger's Syndrome like Kiaro.

Recent Teacher Comments

  • 3/13 10:42 am - Opening long shots are just a bit broad; Great dramatic lighting that fits the mood of the 2nd half. Great music bed that adds to the tension; good audio balance between the VO, music bed and clip audio.
  • 3/13 10:42 am - Strong message & story; ending would benefit from a phone number or online resource. Very effective blue color grading; beautiful sequence beginning @:36 with pacing that conveys what it feels like to be a person with Asperger's.
  • 3/9 3:09 pm - Very nice production, particularly with your voice over. It felt emotional. The camera work and lighting, particularly with Kairo on his bed composing his letter was well done. The narration was well composed and mixed. The shots of the poker game were simple, but they conveyed the message effectively. The punch was effective and felt realistic. It was an overall nice job of adapting a true story into a positive public message. Public Service Announcement statistics should generally be cited to give them greater credence, and the way you worded your statistic is incorrect. There are more than 200 people in the world with Asperger's. Also, your slogan at the end of your PSA is nice, but it would be more effective to tie that slogan to a website or phone number. PSAs should always end with a citation for an organization in which people can go to for more information. Overall, your PSA had some good production value, but it fell short in the writing and structure of the PSA. It wasn't as impactful as i could have been.
  • 3/3 10:04 am - Positive: There is nothing better than real life. Great job taking something that is personal to you and trying to get others to care as well. Really nice job with the narration, building the energy and the angst throughout the writing. It felt emotional. Nice job with the punching scene. You hid it well.
  • 3/3 10:04 am - Improvements: Your stat is misleading. My limited research says that 1.3 out of 1,000 (wiki) or 1 in 250 (aane.org). Your number should be supported with a reference on the screen and a date. Also, your stat makes it sound like only 200 have Asperger's syndrome. Stats and wording matter, especially with PSAs.
Judge 1

Positives: Audio was nice and clean. Lighting was very good, even in the dark room scene.

Improvements: I had to watch it a couple of times to understand the message. This might be because of the complex nature of it. I think you could have been more creative with your camera work especially at the beginning.

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Judge 3

Positives: The second half, when the character is isolated and writing, benefits from interesting lighting and shot choices. Nice, dark, consistent look that mirrors the mood.

Improvements: A bit confusing to say that the character is "1 in 200" with Asperger's, as it makes it sound like there are 200 people who have the condition, and he's one of them. Would be better to say "1 in 200 people has Asperger's". Some sfx work would really help the punch and some of the other moments during the main character's isolated moments.

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