Dream - ID# 264

Lyons Township
Division: AA
School Promotion
Entry Description

This was the promo for the varsity football team. I wanted to tell the story of our team; every player was once a kid who loved playing ball, and worked hard to become a varsity player.

Recent Teacher Comments

  • 4/6 3:47 pm - The song choice helped to tell this story - good driving beat. Good overall story. Use some of the natural audio from the football games to help build that excitement of Friday nights in the fall.
  • 3/12 11:23 am - Highlights were cut together well. Remember to edit to the "hit points" in the music. Good song choice.
  • 3/12 11:22 am - I was expecting highlights of just the one athlete that "grew" into a high school athlete. Misleading the viewer.
  • 3/12 11:22 am - Good transition between boy's feet and adult's feet.
  • 2/28 8:53 am - I like how the song followed the song in the beginning. With the child striving to become better and the transition to the high school player. Good job editing, and text and creating excitement for the game. One suggestion would be to use some natural audio. Overall very strong project.
Judge 1

Positives: Story - Simple concept executed simply and clearly. Not relying too much on the audience. Camera - Game footage composed as it should be. Nice follows, good exposure. Editing - Narrative elements cut naturally with the pace of music. Seems simple, but is often neglected. Same is true of game footage. Well done.

Improvements: Story - No need to use the same gimmick turning the player back into the kid. That holds the viewer's hand a bit much. I suspect a more understated final wide shot of the kid on the sideline watching the game would solidify the emotional intent. Editing - Not sure why the crazy text was used on screen for "built this town". It's out of place. Abandon it or, if it's a theme that runs through various media elements and promotions, put it right at the end before the game announcement.

Judge 2

Positives: the story was creative and clear. camerawork was excellent on rehearsed shots

Improvements: for the scene shot in studio equipment was visible.

Judge 3

Positives: Good story line! It flowed well and kept my attention. Good use of titles

Improvements: I don't think you needed the Sepia, it didn't add anything to the story and it was a little distracting.

Judge 4

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