#Metoo - ID# 273
Glenbrook North
Division: A
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
The #Metoo movement has created an environment in the United States for the empowerment of those affected by some form of sexual abuse. Our subject has to come to terms with his place and what it means to be a victim of sexual abuse in the middle of the #Metoo movement, predominately led by women.
Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/10 9:02 am - SOUND. Lots of silence, almost to much, which leaves your video to much open to interpretation, Some background noise of more news reports, or a song on the radio could have pointed your audience in a direction you wanted them to go. I had a hard time figuring some of the emotions out because I didn’t have a bunch of hints – I felt like an outsider looking in, rather than connecting with the character and feeling what he is going through. STORY. Because the pace of the story seems so slow (the lack of much audio magnifies that perception) it seemed like getting to your plot points took a long time. Had I not read your entry description I would not have gotten your video. Knowing your intent I can see the clues you dropped, but I think they were to subtle, so I had a hard time catching on the story. Interesting and generally unexplored content you covered here, but because it is a different perspective you need to help people not expecting it to catch on easier. CAMERA / VISUALS. Good variety of shots. You had some very creative shots I liked the use of the mirror around 1:00ish EDITING This video seems long, I don’t know that you needed 4:25 to tell this story, sometimes less is more, but it is hard to tell because the lack of audio makes scenes seem longer than they are. But I do think some of the scenes could have been cut shorter for example when he vomits, you sit on the empty bed to long before you cut to the close up of the laptop and nothing seems to be happening.
- 3/9 6:13 pm - Significant audio hiss throughout. Watch autofocus - focus pops. Can’t read the Wikipedia page… Fade out transition is weak. Story is simple and direct, but could use music, sound, design. Any suggestion of what happened to him- are we left to guess?
- 3/6 2:39 pm - CAMERA: Nice variety of shots and angles, with clever use of depth of field. I liked your compositions as well, alternating between sometimes claustrophobically close to shots that are farther away. The mirror was a superb vehicle for some of your shots. AUDIO: I liked how you used the news audio to convey your setting. The overall lack of sound / dialogue was acceptable because you had a compelling character, but the pervasive background hiss was annoying after a while. I actually appreciated the sound of vomiting off camera as a break from the ambient hiss. I feel like the character’s breakthrough moment (around 3:39) could have been emphasized with non-diegetic music, reflecting his build up to the courageous moment. EDITING: Editing pacing was fine, but the overall length of the piece was a bit long. STORY: I really liked this idea. I liked the idea of a male being part of the #metoo movement and overcoming the fears that males have about confronting sexual abuse or molestation. I think this was extraordinarily brave.
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