Christmas With The Kardashians - ID# 286

Wheaton North

Division: AA

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

The Kardashian family gets together to celebrate the holidays, but family drama is bound to erupt.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/24 4:14 pm - Funny dialogue!. I liked that you showed the crew. Poor exposure on the table scene.
• 4/10 10:35 am - Great representation of the reality TV show; you guys capture the look, sound, plot twists, etc so well. Great work! Creating fake drama is difficult and you guys definitely found the drama. My favorite line was about the flavor of carrots, very clever. Moving forward, I would encourage you to keep working on the story arch to ensure there is more of a set-up, into a rising action that builds the conflict, and then some kind of resolution. You guys have pieces of a set-up but you break into the drama so fast, relying on the audience to know your characters, that you forget to build the conflict, and then the end just falls flat. Overall though, great execution, you all are incredibly talented.
• 4/2 11:41 am - Christmas with the Kardashians Good establishing/opening shot Captured the feel of the real Kardashian show Good over-top-acting We see the camera guy too much

Judge 1

Positives: The edits were well paced and the cut-in sound bites worked well. I liked the graphics, simple but effective.

Improvements: Some of the shots were too dark and blurry.

Judge 2

Positives: So funny and ambitious. Lots of people in these shots, which made the camera work, lighting, and editing even more impressive. I often crave this sort of thing and it was delivered nicely with great acting. As for the story, very funny and trite in a good way. Man, how much fun is it to bag on the Kardashians? Loved the way you squeezed humor out of the story, even mining it in the titles, e.g. "hates everyone." Story real estate is valuable and you did a great job of taking advantage of that. Something I don't always see in the work of younger writers/filmmakers. Nice! Loved lines like, "Is it a sin to be hungry?"

Improvements: What could be improved? Tough to answer on this one. Here's one minor criticism. Hang on that last shot longer - the one of the family shooting the fight on their phones. It's a funny beat and I missed it the first viewing. A lot of folks think the story begins and ends on the page but it should always be evolving, from page to final edit/mix. Also would've enjoyed a tiny bit more on Kanye but heck, that's a picky note. Well done!

Judge 3

Positives: Very professional looking... well done

Improvements: Focus problems on some of the zooms... I understand the "shaky" shots, but a few times the zooms were bad

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