21st Century Seniors: Danielle Edition ;* - ID# 383

Maine West

Division: AA

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

21st Century Senior, Danielle, has to make a senior project for her last semester of high school. Throughout making this video she notices that the people around her don't share the same views that she shares about herself. Through this she discovers what it takes to be a better person all while trying to finish her senior project.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/10 10:49 am - There was some great lines in this and some great acting; you guys definitely committed to the bit and the acting was fun to watch. There was a bit of a pacing issue in having a very strong start and then having some points that that were a bit slow. I wasn’t really sure of the context of the piece until reading the Entry Description and I would say making sure we see this as a Vlogger growing up is really important so the humor that follows really makes sense. I like your use of angles when filming dialogue, you definitely have a nice understanding of the filming fundamentals. Moving forward, when producing comedy, there is a rule that timing is everything and how you pace your dialogue and action to hit each joke is really important. Keep working, you have a great foundation!
• 4/2 11:39 am - 21st Century Seniors Very bad audio Music way too loud Poorly shot - distractingly shaky Poorly written, not funny Teenager playing student role Use of copyrighted music throughout

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