"Grey Sunrise" - ID# 427

New Trier

Division: AA

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

What happens in this zany adventure when a producer loses the copy of a script her two writers bought from a ghost writer...

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/24 4:27 pm - The "Office" meets film production. Interesting take on the story. Exposure poor. Audio levels poor. Funny at moments.
• 4/10 10:37 am -
• 4/10 10:37 am - Great movement and pace; the camera work and the dialogue worked well together. The music definitely accompanied the action and set the tone well, kudos! Moving forward, you have a lot riding on the fact that they stole the script, but you cut to the teacher walking… for important lines of dialogue it’s best to show the person saying these things. Put the emphasis on the most important words.The script falls short ultimately since it’s just a brainstorming session which suggests maybe you improvised the idea of improvising. Having a set plan will help next time.
• 4/2 11:41 am - Grey Sunrise “The Office” camerawork unsuccessful and overdone Bad lighting Bad angles Terrible audio Was this improvised? Lacks structure

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