Grief - ID# 435

Eisenhower

Division: AA

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

After a young girl loses her father, she struggles to navigate her life without him. She is stuck between grieving and trying to move on.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/2 11:38 am - Grief Good lighting Some interesting shots/motion Audio levels way too low (we cranked up volume on both TV and computer, still could barely hear) Grief counseling scene broke 180 rule Need to distinguish between phone camera and regular - “turn the camera off” is otherwise confusing
• 3/11 4:37 pm - Story: I can’t really comment on this because I couldn’t hear anything. Apparently someone died and she feels sad about it. That’s about all I got. Camera: Fundamentally solid work here with the exception of the scene where she was talking to a teacher or counselor or something. Your framing was off and you crossed the line pretty badly so it didn’t look like they were talking to each other. Lighting: Solid work here. You lighting was consistently good. Colors looked good. Sound: This is a disaster. I literally couldn’t hear almost anything- dialogue, music, nothing. Editing: Seems solid except for the sound element. Final Thoughts: I’m sorry the sound isn’t there. There might be a solid project here.

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