Cyber Bullying PSA - ID# 456

Vernon Hills

Division: AA

Public Service Announcement

Entry Description

An extremely short, fast-paced, and metaphorical storyline built around the idea of being "cyber-friendly." The subjects start on a street, alone with nobody to turn too. Each time the victim is bullied he gets closer to the perpendicular street; representing the moment he decides to suicide.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/8 11:19 am - VO not very clear/clean. Enunciation should be cleaner where we can hear what is being said. Nice shots and visual effects. I don't get the ending. Because he was texting he got hit by the red car? Good concept, but should have worked on ending more to make it more clear and impactful.

Judge 1

Positives: You had some good camera shots in there. I liked the use of time-lapse.

Improvements: I have to be honest, if it didn't say "cyber-bullying" in the title I wouldn't have been able to figure out what this was about. I get you were trying to change up the look but it was too dark. And keep it simple man. There was a whole lot being said very quickly and I had a hard time following. I felt like I was being lectured by an auctioneer, but I didn't understand what I was being lectured about.

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Judge 3

Positives: The look of this piece is unique and dynamic. love the horns! nice color grading and layering, and interesting editing.

Improvements: The narrative and theme lose me as we get to the middle and end of the piece. Protagonist and Antagonist are clearly facing each other at their desks, but then the protagonist is sitting in his chair in the middle of the street with no desk. What happened to his desk? And was he hit by a car? Confusing. Also, voice-over is read too fast and needs to be clearer.

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