Build That Wall - ID# 453

West Chicago

Division: AA

Public Service Announcement

Entry Description

In the divisive times in which we find ourselves, this PSA asks an important question - if we're going to build walls, what kind should they be?

Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/8 4:38 pm - STRENGTHS - Good cinematography and editing. Music was effective in building a dramatic mood. The black and white was a good choice. QUESTIONS / SUGGESTIONS - Try using a noise-reducing filter to cut down on the loud ambient sound of the recording - voices were hard to hear over it. The dialog felt a little over the top.
• 3/8 10:56 am - Effective way to convey the message. Dialogue audio quality could have been better. When we are supposed to hear him it is too low under music (at beginning). You cannot see person they are protecting. Would be nice to be able to see him within the surrounding mass of protectors.

Judge 1

Positives: I both like and dislike the story. I like the idea of standing up and standing with others when they are faced with injustice. The black and white look is effective.

Improvements: Now the part I didn't like about the story. I think the "let's build a wall of protection around those we love" story gives the unintended message of "the best way to fight injustice is to isolate the victim". Consider a story like "instead of building walls, let's build bridges" instead. Also don't be afraid to use extreme close-ups. When the kid is firing off the insults use some shots of just his mouth as the words come out, or just his eyes with a look of anger/hate as you hear the insults directed at the other kid.

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Judge 3

Positives: Strong, simple concept which can be visually communicated. I like your black and white look, too.

Improvements: I think the antagonist's performance could have been strengthened with a few more close-ups of him, showing his transition from angry and abusive to blocked and ineffective. Camera work was a little shaky and would benefit from some stabilization.

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