Sweater - ID# 473

Back of the Yards College Prep

Division: AA

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

A silent film by David Morales

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/10 10:51 am - Nice action built up with the audio and the shots. You definitely kept my attention. Moving forward, I would work on creating more stylized shots to match the drama and build the suspense and tension. For instance, when the student is hiding in the lab, you could have a whole sequence of shots that show the students perspective, the security guard's perspective, close-ups, sweating, etc… don’t rush scenes. The comedy is in the absurdness of the situation, show that absurdity in as much detail as possible. You have some great foundational skills here, keep at it.
• 4/2 11:44 am - Sweater Many good shots (could have used a bigger variety, though) Interesting concept Music didn’t flow very well Concept could have been better executed

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