My Weird Obsession - ID# 76

Marist

Division: AA

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

On this episode of My Weird Obsession, high school student Tammy battles her addiction of eating paper. Will she put an end to her obsession? Watch this episode to find out.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/24 4:21 pm - Funny. The relapse I really liked. Jump cuts don't work. Needed music. Interview with friend funny. Nice work.
• 4/10 10:51 am - This was a funny bit. I commend you for eating paper, that’s pretty high commitment level, nice work! You have a nice set-up but there doesn’t seem to be any struggle to change, I would have loved to see her work to pick certain foods over paper. If the punchline is that she eats paper, then the punchline is over within the first few seconds. However, if you can build off that punchline, and extend the drama, subsequently extending the comedy (since the drama of eating paper is simply absurd), you will have more story to work with and more scenes to build into your script. You have some great foundational skills here, keep working at it!
• 4/2 11:42 am - My Weird Obsession Girl whose friend died due to fertilizer is good actor Jump cuts Needs music Weak ending Did a poor job recreating My Strange Addiction, should have been more exaggerated Could have used more of a variety of shots

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