Locked In - ID# 117
Morton East
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
"After an exhausting day of work, Paper Joe goes to the movies. Unfortunately for him, an unexpected occurrence forces him to take drastic measures to save himself". Music Resources: The Production Garden-Volume 10-Images, Track 4-License was purchased from Production Garden Music on January 31, 2007. The Production Garden-Volume 13-Idea Tracks, Track 83, License was purchased from Production Garden Music on January 31, 2007.
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/22 1:19 pm - Cool idea that's much different from the rest of the submissions in the category. Good job with the stop motion! It's a nice simple idea that works. Having seen this now, I'm wondering how far you can take this style into something more complex? Good job over all and it was a nice break from the typical style that most employed in the category!
- 4/17 8:49 pm - Love the stop motion. Great job overall. Your story was simple but clearly told and your protagonist had a certain amount of charm to him that was fun to watch. The conflict was clear. What was missing to the story was rising action. The problem was introduced and solved so quickly it wasn't much of a problem at all. I wanted to see more of a struggle, perhaps in the bathroom first before he decides to go into the ceiling. Once he's in the ceiling, another problem of some sort needs to arise. Musically, you needed to do a bit more. The music gets appropriately intense during the rising action, but it never changes once the protagonist overcomes the conflict. It needed to. Overall, great work, keep animating and have fun!
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