Seeing Clearly - ID# 146

Geneva

Documentary

Entry Description

One student is learning how to deal with a rare medical condition.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/25 8:29 pm - This is an extended news package.
• 4/22 3:23 pm - This is a long news package, not a documentary built on experts. The standup and close made it very clear it's a news package.
• 4/20 4:08 pm - +What a good story! Wow. Powerful interview by his father. +Nice graphics -Seems like a news package rather than a documentary. -The people at the table in the back of the mom's interview are distracting -Where does this girl come from at the end?? She should have been introduced at the beginning too... again, this seems like a news package.
• 3/5 2:26 pm - This is a news package (stand-up reporter). Positives: 2:00 focus/blur gimmick goes well with the narration; some variety in the B-roll of his activities and family interaction. Areas for improvement: 2:05 "opened a door..." doesn't need to be as deliberate to be effective, as it draws too much attention to the gimmick.

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