Bubble Gum - ID# 172

Wheaton North

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

A comedic account of a girl who goes through the struggle of stepping on some gum. The gum sticks to her shoe through all of the girl's attempts to remove it and even grows larger as the day goes on! Will she ever get the gum off of her shoe? Or will the girl be chewed up over this sticky situation?

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/24 4:31 pm - Fun story! The protagonist's performance was great and the music really paced the cut well. The sequence of pulling the items out of the bag was great and fun to watch. The production value was largely good, though a few shots were in soft focus. Some additional lighting for the indoor sequences would have helped. Some shots, particularly at the end of the washing sequence were too dark. Work on pacing the edit of your cut better. Some shots you had in that were not needed. The pace really dragged at the beginning of the film. Once it's clear that she's going outside and leaving her house, get her there and to the conflict quicker. I think it took you 4-6 shot to get her from the keys to the gum. That could have easily been cut in half without losing any of the story. Keep that in mind as you shoot for coverage and when you're executing continuity editing.
• 4/19 6:03 am - Great pacing with your editing. Did not hold any shots too long. Great camera shots. Good use of Close-Up shots. Good use of music choices. Performers did a great job. Great job of visually telling your story. Very well done!
• 4/12 12:31 pm - Some of the best ideas are simple ones that involve conflict-- this one fits! Actors do a good job playing into the melodrama of the whole ordeal. Music establishes intended mood, variety of shot types and angles work well within the edit. Overall a solid job!

Judge 1

Positives: Camera: Good visual storytelling. Some of the shots are maybe a tad on the nose, but you clearly thought this out and demonstrate a good variety of shot compositions and angles. Lighting: It looks like all natural lighting, but you picked well-lit locations, and you have no issues with shadows, muddiness, etc. Nicely done.

Improvements: Editing: Overall, I thought the pace was a little plodding. You have a couple of fade outs that I think interrupt the flow of your story. Story: I like the scope of your story for the time limit you had to work with, but I ended up wishing there were a bit more of a payoff at the end. The new stick of gum is clever (or ironic), but I wonder if we could come up with something even more satisfying.

Judge 2

Positives: Fun concept, really well executed, nice camera work, and all around a strong short.

Improvements: The intro *before* the gum on shoe could be shortened. We get it, she's having a good day.

Judge 3

Positives: Great characters—no dialog was perfect

Improvements: N/a

Judge 4

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