Mondays Movie Trailer - ID# 216
Waubonsie Valley
Movie Trailer
Entry Description
movie trailer about the one day of the week that you dread
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/25 1:17 pm - The formula for a movie trailer was followed very well here. Major characters and a problem was introduced and built toward a climactic event that leaves the viewer in suspense. The execution left room to be desired. One of the opening closeups is out of focus, appearing to be set to autofocus and struggling to sharpen in the low light. The soundtrack needs finessing as the dialogue is very echoey and hard to hear. Back ground chatter from the director is audible and could be eliminated with the use of a microphone to record your audio. The titling do not reflect the serious aesthetic that the trailer strives for.
- 4/23 12:31 pm - "Go"- you can hear the director talking at the start. Titles were a bit elementary- seemed too basic for a serious movie. Acting was sub-par as you could hear in the voices talking that acting was not their strength. Had some really good shots including the hanging from the railing and the body being swept away. You have the basis for some good stuff, but it needs better structure to work. I want to know what I'm getting into when I go see this movie- not just what cool shots I'll see. Work on building up the anticipation of the intense moments and focus on those.
- 4/10 9:19 pm - This felt like a trailer! Great introduction to the protagonist! You hooked me with the character introduction and I was ready to follow the protagonist and his friends through his story. The pacing and rising action was very well done. Titles and text were good. I also thought you're cliche lines in the trailer were very indicative of lines we all usually hear in movie trailers. Unfortunately, your conflict wasn't clear enough. I get that something happens on Monday, but what? You hint at it visually, but your character voice over needed to spell it out for the audience "every Monday. Someone disappears." You say that, now I understand and your rising action feels more grounded. You also probably should better define your genre. You have suspenseful music coupled with a comedic font on your text. So which is it? Is this a parody film? Some good camera work and lighting. Work on sharpening your focus in some shots. My overall advice for you is to make things clearer for your audience. Always assume your audience is ignorant of everything. Show and tell them important pieces of information. Don't leave them to guess. If they have to guess, they won't care and if they don't care, they won't watch. Keep working at this! You've got some good stuff here!
- 3/4 9:43 am - I really like the shot at 10 seconds, the lighting is great however the audio is a little low. The text and transitions you chose are not professional looking (looks like iMovie). The running through the hallways over the shoulder is captivating.
- 2/26 10:52 am - CAMERA: a few decent shots, but a lot of shots that are shaky and out of focus. AUDIO: Your overall audio mix is bad; make sure you're watching the VU meter when you're recording AND editing. Dialogue levels should be between -6 and -12 db, sound effects between -12 and -18 db, and music beds should be around -24 db. STORY: is this a parody? Is it meant to be a trailer for a comedy? Is it meant to be dramatic? Your overall production is inconsistent. The music doesn't fit the acting and dialogue. The titles are kind of goofy and inconsistent, making me feel like this is supposed to be a parody. The acting is terrible; is that supposed to be on purpose because it's a comedy? Also you misspelled the word "piece" on your wanted poster.
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