Warrior Update - ID# 217

Waubonsie Valley

News Program

Entry Description

Waubonsie Valley's news video magazine

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/25 10:08 pm - Anchor does a nice job opening the show and show intro/music is effective. Throw the story to someone or have the segment talent introduce themselves. Allow your audience to create a relationship with the people they are watching/listening to on TV. Is Orchesis Showcase an actual sponsor or are you promoting their showcase? Music ends a little abruptly into cut to Valentine's Day pick up lines. Elly is gutsy and has no issues going right up to people with the pick up lines. You need this to be a good reporter. Some nice work throughout.
• 4/25 2:22 pm - Good intro by host. Muslim students- good amount of interviews. Wrestling- Some b-roll could have been closer up Sponsors - Orchesis Showcase paid you to advertise their upcoming event? Pick up lines - There should have been some sort of intro for it. It just started and it took me a bit to figure out what is going on. Swimming - good variety of b-roll.
• 4/4 1:45 pm - Good anchor start, by using effective teases to draw viewers into the show. The show is very well produced. The first story gives some great information about the topic and teaches the viewers what this club or group is. The framing of the anchors and the pacing of the entire show is strong. Try to use some natural sound on in the stories. It will add another layer of depth to you packages. Toss to commercial is awkward because I did not know what it was sponsoring the show? It should be a simple toss “we will be right back after this..” The joke segment did not work for me. It took away from the other stories. Slow down the shots in the swimming package. Good job with this newscast. You provide some solid information to your school about the items going on around them.

Judge 1

Positives: Packages are well done with good use of b roll. "Commercial" was well cut.

Improvements: Do not like the effect to the packages. The setting for the main anchor (Hannah) is distracting. The pick up lines package is a little unsettling.

Judge 2

Positives: - Your package on the Muslim Student Association did a great job of mixing in shot composition. I like the cuts from wide shots to medium to tight and so forth. That's such a good habit to get into, and it really helps your story flow much better. - There seems to be a good flow to the show as a whole. That's not always easy to achieve, so nice work.

Improvements: - Your anchor introduction has to be more compelling to draw your audience in. It's easy to keep the most important facts/tidbits of information in the package, but the anchor introduction is really your chance to sell your story. Try to spice those up next time. - When writing packages, there's a general rule of thumb. The more natural sound and soundbites you can use, the better. Try not to keep your reporter track longer than two sentences at times, unless the story requires it. Interject enough to help it flow, and let your soundbites and natural sound pops fill in the rest.

Judge 3

Positives: Nice use of headlines leading into the show open. Very smooth delivery from the anchor (but I guess it took a few takes from the looks of those bloopers at the end :) Good lead package. Important issue. Would have been even more effective to focus the story around one of the Muslim students.

Improvements: More variety of shots in the wrestling video would help. Every shot was medium. Mix in some real close-ups too! Swimming story was pretty straight forward. Could have used a more creative angle or focus on something that makes this team different.

Judge 4

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