The Killer Among Us - ID# 211
Marist
Movie Trailer
Entry Description
Five students, trapper for the night with a killer. Who will survive?
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/10 9:44 pm - The setup for your movie is good. You introduced the characters and conflict rather well. But work on pacing out your rising action. The rising action was so obviously staged, it was difficult to know if this trailer was taking itself seriously as a horror film or if it was a parody. The audience needs to be able to tell the difference. Otherwise they'll get confused and won't want to see the film. I really liked the shot in the auditorium until the guy started running. Then it felt cheesy. The actor shouldn't laugh, or you should have simply had the antagonist murder him on the stage. It would have made for a better effect. Also, even though you introduce 5 characters, we never see most of them in the trailer after the beginning. It would be nice to include moments with each of them so the audience can remember and feel further connected. Make sure your titles are free from spelling errors.
- 3/27 5:25 pm - Plot is a bit confusing. Why are these people paying with their lives? Did they do something to deserve this? More info on this could make for a more compelling movie. Audio is a mess at times. Characters are not mic-ed up, and music dips and cuts all over the place. Trailer ends with the music just abruptly cutting off. Camera movement is a problem- camera zooms in and out in the auditorium when the guy is being chased (and he's laughing). Watch the wording in the titles- high school is two words!!!
- 3/4 9:54 am - Dialogue is cut off "Oh my..." Instead of text it might have been better with a voiceover "5 Students" The quality of some of the shots is poor, blurry, out of focus, shaky. Why is the guy smiling when he is getting chased? I like the hallway shot at 1 min and 3 seconds
- 2/26 12:10 pm - You can hear someone laughing silently at around 12 seconds. Kind of a bad start if you want people to take your horror movie trailer seriously. Maybe cut that part of the audio out in post. Your audio levels BLOW UP at around 34 seconds. Also, that title is not grammatically correct - High School...not Highschool. English matters. The scene in the auditorium where the killer sneaks up on stage behind the guy was cool for a moment, until the guy started running away and he was smiling. As a director, you should have called "cut!" and re-shot the sequence until your actor took it seriously.
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