LiNEAR - ID# 237

Neuqua Valley
Dramatic Narrative
 

Entry Description

An excerpt of the original 10 minute short film, "LiNEAR." A teenager's life gets turned upside down when he lives the most mind-boggling 24 hours of his life. Song Credits: "Arcterra" - Jeff Kurtenacker "Cinematic Documentary" - AShamaluev.

Recent Teacher Comments

  • 4/26 7:01 am - You have great choices with camera work music, and sets. It is hard to look at the whole piece knowing approximately 66% of it is missing, As beautiful as your credit sequence was, I would have love to have seen more of the story to get more of a feel for what is going on. Use the five minutes to give me a better sense of the the excerpt represents. And where the holes are, fill that in with the description. It is very clear in your head I am sure because you created this world, but for someone like me peeking in at parts it is hard to put it all together. What I saw I like, I would love to see it in its entirety somewhere, you do a great job of blending the arts of camera, acting, editing, and sound. Next time just submit as much of the story as you can vs the title sequence.
  • 4/25 12:10 pm - The music was good. The dialogue was written well and the guy actor had good delivery. The lighting in some of the shots was done well but at the beginning it didn't seem to be white balanced well. Overall, very nice and I would be intrigued to see the full film.
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