Maddi Jones: expressing her creativity - ID# 265

York

Documentary

Entry Description

A senior shows off her unique collections and tells us where her fascination of bugs, teeth, and bones all began. Song: herbal tea - Artificial.Music https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9mqg7fpeUo4

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/25 8:21 pm - Seems like an interesting girl who has some unique interests. Visuals are solid and add a nice component to the story. Would benefit from some other voices speaking to her creative nature and abilities.
• 4/22 3:15 pm - Really interesting hook to start, but it still doesn't pay off why she collects really weird stuff- just because people in her family did? Then the end... she played at Lola?!? That's more interesting than her collecting ants, right? A lot of questions remain from the audience's perspective. The focus on the camera looks like it's stuck on Auto, very distracting when she moves in and out of focus.
• 4/20 2:29 pm - +Good b-roll of what she's actually talking about +interesting topic, especially for a high school student -audio sounds like it's from the camera--it would be better to use an external audio recording device if possible -Could we interview her family about this? A documentary should really have more than one interviewee -Now we're talking about the guitar? Seems very random and abrupt. Stick to one topic.
• 3/5 1:51 pm - Positives: Visually interesting setting-- she's clearly in her element. Areas for improvement: Feels like 2 stories. The only connection between the story in the first half and the story in the second half is the title. There is no connection made when transitioning between the teeth & bones segment and the music segment. Focus issue at 1:45.

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