Heck - ID# 277
Glenbrook North
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
Logan wakes up for what seems like a normal day, but things just keep going wrong. They don't destroy his day, but these peculiar events become extremely inconvenient.
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/23 10:35 am - Loved the story idea and the play on the severity of the degree of the words Hell vs. Heck. In terms of proof of concept, this feels like it could be developed into a longer form short film, or run wild and turn it into a feature film. Music choices help sell the idea for sure, overall well done and a solid entry in this category!
- 4/17 8:34 pm - Good short story structure. The idea to focus on a single character was good. Your conflict was clear, and the scenarios you portrayed were all universally, mildly annoying for most of us. A state of heck, not hell. I get it. The film was shot well. Shots were well exposed and the action was well paced. Editing was solid. The story itself needed a little bit more nuance. You tried to end with a twist, which is good for short films, but this fell a bit flat. I think you needed to build the action a bit more and have your protagonist be a bit more frantic before the resolution of it being a dream. The editing needed some more j and l cutting to make the interactions between father and son less jerky and more nuanced. The music you chose was all not royalty free so this is going to be a disqualification. Make sure your music is free license as per the rules. Overall good work. Keep making films!
Judge 1
Positives:
Improvements:
Judge 2
Positives:
Improvements:
Judge 3
Positives:
Improvements:
Judge 4
Positives:
Improvements: