Goldfish Story - ID# 302
Bremen
Natural Audio News Package
Entry Description
A musician stopped by Bremen High School to explain the inspiration for one of his songs
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/26 7:12 am - All one angle Needs more broll Would love an establishing shot and more cutaways, maybe a second angle of the speaker
- 4/26 1:42 am - Your piece contains a lively storyteller with a worthy story. As I watch him present his narrative, I have several thoughts. I want to know who is listening and how this audience is responding to his story. I also want to know what the song inspired by his daughter sounds like. Unfortunately, I really do not get answers to these questions. How might you have used your camera and microphone to give your viewer a more comprehensive and entertaining story? At times, your audio tracks compete with each other.
- 4/23 2:25 pm - I like the start of the video, but it could have been even better because you could have used him playing the uke for the start. Try to use more of him playing to make your story stronger. Try to be on the same level as the subject of the story, and then also try to mic him so that he is always clear. You could have offered more cutaways and not just kept the same position as you did during the entire story. Try to move a little bit for this story. I like the story, but try to blend the song into the story, which would make it stronger.
- 4/10 2:42 pm - There is a solid recording of the goldfish story here. The big issue here is a lack of supporting visuals for the story. There was only a couple of cutaway shots(notebook, locker) from the same upward angle of the musician.I would have liked to see b-roll of audience reactions or close-ups of the instruments playing. There appears to be another band member that would have worked well to cut to facial expressions or close ups of hands strumming the guitar or foot tapping. You need to get creative when using b-roll especially when it is one long story.
- 3/10 11:36 am - TOUGH SHOOTING UP AT MULTIPLE FLUORESCENTS. 0:40 IN AND WE NEED AUDIENCE CUTAWAYS. TOO MUCH TIME ON VIDEO OF HIM. NOT MUCH STORYTELLING. NO IDEA WHOM HE WAS ADDRESSING OR WHY.
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