Strong "Foundation" - Dramatic Narrative - MMEA Submission 2019 - ID# 371

South Elgin

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

A young woman prepares for a date but the foundation she applies is masked by an abusive secret. Directed by: Grace Cork, South Elgin High School Music credit: Audioblocks

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/25 9:44 pm - The reveal was done well. Sometimes it was hard to read the texts, not enough time, which may have been done on purpose, but having a few of them linger on some of the more 'telling' abusive words could have had a greater impact. It saddened me that she smiled at the end. It was short and to the point and just the right length. No audible dialogue and that worked.

Judge 1

Positives: Certainly strikes a powerful cord about abuse. I liked the shot when the actress looks direct into camera as the camera slides from side to side; almost letting the audience see her true hesitance for just a moment.

Improvements: The sound of the phone needed an equalizer on it. The hiss that came along with the vibrating sound was very distracting. There wasn't much of a character arch.

Judge 2

Positives: Excellent premise. Good performance.

Improvements: Terrible ending and sends a bad message about women accepting abuse from men. Some camerawork made texts difficult to read.

Judge 3

Positives: The sound design and camera.

Improvements: I couldn't read what the text messages were saying, and therefore, felt like I was missing some important story points.

Judge 4

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