Paper Clip Commercial - ID# 412

Back of the Yards College Prep

Commercial

Entry Description

A commercial for everyone's favorite office supply!

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/25 9:18 pm - You have some really nice, stable camera movements of different people jumping with the paper clip ropes. I would have liked to see a bigger variety of framing choices as everything seems to be wide. Throw in a close up of a reaction to stopping the chain or some tighter shots of feet jumping. I am having trouble making the connection of the beginning shots of a single paper to the later shots of jumping rope. I thought your song choice was a good one and the editing held a good pace.
• 4/25 9:03 pm - Some fascinating settings. Also, some of the imagery really pops out. An interesting concept for the commercial! Only problem is that the commercial could have easily been on thirty seconds and it would have been stronger. Less is more for commercials like these.

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