MMEA Fest

A short documentary about an undocumented teenager.

4/25 8:24 pm - Very interesting story just wish you delved a little more into what she deals with being an undocumented immigrant. I was confused by the lighting, were you trying to hide her identity? Because if you were you could clearly make out her face in a few shots so I am not sure what the purpose was there. I enjoyed the use of B-Roll showing use a glimpse of how she lives her life but wish their was more of that.
4/24 11:22 am - +Strong topic idea -The font is very basic... maybe pick something a little more interesting -This is a tough topic for a documentary since you can’t show her and you have very minimal b-roll. -You are trying to hide her but you say her name..I’m confused.
4/22 3:17 pm - Great idea to tell a story around DACA, but to flicker the light throughout is really interesting, but overwhelmingly distracting. Showing a consistent tight shot or backlit shot would help the viewer focus on what she is saying. More broll would help as well. The ending of the narrative feels very quick and not complete.
3/5 1:57 pm - Positives: Interesting lighting technique symbolizing the feeling of living in the shadows, but sometimes its just too dark. Perhaps if the lighting gradually got stronger as more of her story was revealed, it might work. Areas for improvement: Story needs titles; it is too dependent on the interview footage, needs a lot more b-roll. Music bed is disconnected from the storyline. Odd fade to white at 2:44.

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