Monti PCAC Interview - ID# 467

Riverside Brookfield
Natural Audio News Package
Entry Description

An Interview with Mr.Monti a member of PCAC(Pick Collectors Against Cancer) talking about PCAC and his exposure to cancer as a child.

Recent Teacher Comments

  • 4/26 7:09 am - It took a while for me to figure out what the story was, shaving a beard to raise money for cancer. I understand I need the backstory, but I just needed to know where we were going so could place all the pieces in a schema that made sense to me. Great B-Roll I know it is an excerpt so I am not sure if began abruptly or ended abruptly or both because of the trimming of the story. Either way what I saw started and stopped abruptly Great sound, nice and rich, would have loved more natural audio when possible (the sound of the razors on the beard)
  • 4/25 11:16 am - You've chosen an appropriate topic for this piece. This certainly is a story with a colorful personality behind it worth sharing. That being said, how might you have enhanced the richness of this individual's story through your video and audio tracks? In other words, what additional b-roll material and natural audio would deepen your viewer's sense of this man and his experience? Because this is an excerpt, I cannot determine exactly how this piece is organized. Similarly, I can't evaluate how you introduced and concluded this piece. Area on which to work: Continue to work on using the "leading look" when applicable. In this piece, your subject was framed almost in the center of the shot. In addition watch focus (the interviewee is a little soft).
  • 4/23 2:16 pm - I like the framing of the interview. I wish there was more natural audio from the music that could have been used. There is not enough of the natural sound aspect in this story. I wish you would have kept the sound from the buzzing of his hair with the students. There is just not enough here besides the interview, try to work in audio from other sources to make the story stronger.
  • 4/10 3:24 pm - The interview here is framed nicely and sounds great! The issue here is the lack of natural sound and on-location b-roll to help tell the story. We don’t see anything other than a talking head until 0:30 so it is hard to keep interest in the story. If all you have to work with visually is pictures, try and add some subtle movement(like you did from 0:31-0-35 and1:40-1:43) to them to add some dynamics to the video. You have a great story here that needed some natural sound and b-roll to bring it all together!
  • 3/10 11:25 am - START WITH NATSOT FROM THE BAND TO PULL VIEWERS IN. BAND NATSOT SHOULD HAVE BEEN THE BED FOR THE ENTIRE PIECE. THERE WERE NO NATSOT BREAKS AT ALL. GOOD SOUND BITES BUT LACKED WHAT THIS CATEGORY MANDATES - NATSOT. TECHNICALLY SOUND.
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