He might be one of the top recruits in the nation, but you'd have no idea while talking with him.
Positives: Loved the idea of finding the desk that Rylie broke and having him sit down, react and begin to tell his story. Nice use of tweets and headlines going through frame to help tell this story.
Improvements: I would have preferred to have Rylie stay in the interview location with the desk to tell his story - FAR better sound (never easy controlling outdoor sound), far better lighting (you'll need a lot of equipment to counter balance the sun to make an interview subject look good) Getting another person or people tell different facets of Riley's story would have added much more depth to this narrative.
Positives: The b-roll is effective. The desk scene is well lit.
Improvements: Dialogue levels are inconsistent. Please use a volume units meter to check your dialogue levels across the film. Dialogue is noisy and needs to clean up. The subject talks too fasts and mumbles some words. I don't understand every word.
Positives: The opening worked well. Good use of stock footage.
Improvements: Exterior location audio interview could have been improved. Could have used some other interviews for different perspectives, friends, parents, coaches, etc.
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