Beneath the Snow - ID# 530

New Trier

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

By Tyler Shinohara. For MMEA Film Fest 2019 consideration in the "Dramatic Narrative" category

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/26 7:06 am - Your opening shot didn’t do much to entice me into the story, it was to long break it up, same with the conversation at the counter, too long on one shot, after a while there was too much laughing among the actors which ruined the credibility of the story. These conversations needed cutaways and close ups to let the audience know what the listeners are thinking as the conversation unfolds. Is there a reason the eye contact is so minimal, the guy seldom looks at the girl talking, and in half of the shots the girls face is hidden by her hair. Continuity errors going from dark (saying goodbye to Elizabeth, but then it is light again when he walks away in the closing shot. Not sure what the story was.
• 4/25 10:53 am - There was a lot of dialogue and made it hard to keep track sometimes, as well as the background noise in starbucks. Nice job on the location though, visually it was good and there was a variety of shots.

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