Space - ID# 556

Maine South

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

A young man falls into a deep hypnagogic loop while committing suspicious activities. Music Courtesy of: CO.AG Music: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aVGfTriMQbg Artzie Music: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=b6RyQGQw1ig icompetech.com: "Lithium" Free Music Archive: Woods of Doom by Cryosyncopy Creepy Delta Ship by Sro

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/26 7:07 am - Your opening montage was a little loud and confusing (maybe to long) Lighting in opening scenes was orange. I understand if you don’t use / have access to a lighting kit, however I would have made some attempts to correct in post production. This story was really hard to follow, I know it might be clear to you, but you have to give clues to your audience so they can stay engaged. Audiences love patterns and if you give me something to help me understand when he is coming in and out of a loop it might have. Been easier to follow. Audio levels are all over the place. Generally music was really hot in relation to the dialogue.
• 4/25 10:15 am - It was difficult to see some of the shots, having some lighting instead of just natural lighting would have helped add to some of the menacing parts. The effects where half of the body was kind of flopping in the air, was done well. The music correlated well to what was going on.

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