Freshman - ID# 88

Crown Point

Documentary

Entry Description

Jessica Carrothers, a freshman prodigy, discusses her impact on the team's undefeated record. With her almost 23 points per and her love for the game, she look to keep producing for the lady Dogs in hopes of a state championship.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/25 8:28 pm - Visually really strong and well done. Interesting story but the strength is in the visuals.
• 4/24 11:20 am - +Good attention getter at the beginning...there is a very long pause of black afterwards though +Glad you were able to get the coach +Nice shooting overall +Nice having the broadcasting VO over the footage -Coach doesn't know where to look in the interview. That's the job of the producer to tell him. -Shot with the coach is a low angle--would be better if you were eye level
• 4/22 3:20 pm - Good hook, but it takes too long to actually see her play to pay it off with a lot more game footage than what you showed. It looked like you overcompensated for a lack of coverage. We didn't get a full story, more of a spotlight for a news program than a full documentary. The announcer track went way too long. If there was more of a complete story and more broll this could be really good.
• 3/5 2:03 pm - Positives: Great opening titles & music; retiming the first game footage lets you feel like you're getting to know her mood & intensity; nice change in intensity of the music as the story peaks. Areas for improvement: B-roll clip of coach at 2:01 is awkward;

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