Stairs Into Terror - ID# 147
Morton East
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
A student is on her way to detention when a force leads her to uncover secrets.
Copyright Info
Paid Lifetime Blanket License to Production Garden Music
Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/16 8:04 pm - You have some cool moments in this video and considering there is no dialogue you do a good job of picking music that tells your audience what they should be feeling. However, there really isn’t a story here, just a lot of walking, and waiting, and walking, and more waiting for something to happen. When working with a silent film, you need to have corners for your character to turn, happy, sad, stressed, relieved. Otherwise nothing is really happening and it is just a video of watching someone do something – in this case walking to the depths of the school. The papers she finds on the floor were confusing to me, were they passes from former captured students, because if they were they didn’t look anything like the pass she was carrying. I guess I would have loved that visual parallel from the beginning where you see the name and the pass she was holding now on top of the pile of all the other passes, then you can fade to black and roll your credits. And if those papers weren’t passes, then what were they because I was confused.
- 3/10 12:00 pm - Positives: Black & white filter adds to the mysterious scary theme; the music is very dynamic for building tension and drama. Great chase music in the last section; Good location with stairs that lead to unknown places removed from other people. Areas for improvement: Intro music is tense & ominous, and doesn't match the video action, in which the main character looks like she's walking to someplace familiar; Story needs work: there needs to be a reason she is drawn to the staircase... a sound, a voice or something that would intrigue her but put her on her guard, not just because she's curious; need more close-ups of her face from different angles during her journey that show her growing tension and nervousness. It's hard to get that from a long or medium shot. Ghost should walk in a menacing manner, an then scare the crap out of her in a quick editing cut, before taking her down. That section was paced too slowly and was not scary.
- 3/9 7:43 pm - stable shots; framing is nice; plot a little slow; music matched nicely; I was scared!
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