Carpentry - ID# 153

Morton East

Natural Audio News Package

Entry Description

This news package informs viewers about a high school carpentry class. Viewers will learn about a project that students in the class are working on, as well as some of the skills students are acquiring in the class.

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Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/1 9:59 am - Good natsot to open. How about the first shot being ultra-tight on something to spark interest and curiosity? Jump-cut at :06. Interview all subjects where the action is. All interviews are jump-cuts - even with different speakers. If you must go hand-held, take steps with grip, stance & zoom to achieve the steadiest shot possible; also consider a monopod when space is too tight for three legs. :31 - don't need to return to him on-camera. You already established him visually. Just keep showing us great b-roll over his bites and all other bites. :42 - bite was up-cut. Certainly great shots of action but how about a couple tight shots on faces, eyes to give us more emotion? Story was missing the beginning and the end; needed a few shots of the design phase toward the top; needed a final shot of how the heck they were going to move this now big/heavy thing out of the work area!
• 2/25 6:31 am - Fast paced editing and montage of jump cuts in the beginning work for this piece. Your overall editing pace is fast. You bring in a lot of student perspectives and the teacher's perspective, and because of your fast pace, we learn a LOT about this school's carpentry program in a very short amount of time. The last few interviews did a nice job of summing up the benefits of this program. Your interviews were all well-shot and exposed, audio was clean. The b-roll was intense! You did a great job of capturing a lot of what they were doing, mixing up wide shots, close ups, full shots, etc. Some of the b-roll camera work was a little bit shaky; consider using a tripod while shooting your b-roll.

Judge 1

Positives: Good visuals showing a mix of wide, medium and tight shots. The natural sound helped the story flow.

Improvements: Don't cut the interview sound too close in the beginning of each soundbite, you can hear a pop. The lighting and color correcting. Some shots looked blue.

Judge 2

Positives: -It was extremely easy to understand the entire way though! The plot moved and flowed really well too. You started more broadly about what we were seeing in the carpentry class, what project they were working on, and then moved to other themes about why the skills are great for the future. -I think the audio was clean all the way though. It was the appropriate level when it was just the nat sound we were hearing, and also the appropriate level during the b-roll and interviews.

Improvements: Ways you can take your pkg to the next level: -Loved hearing the nat sound at the beginning and end especially! You can take those nat pops though of the different equipment and weave them in throughout the pkg instead of all at once at the beginning -Your interviews were all framed well in rule of thirds, but when you have that many interviews you'll want to mix up the framing, especially if you plan to show them back to back. Other side of rule of thirds. -Saw a few jump cuts during the beginning shots. Careful about those. Expand your shooting from wide, medium, tight to.... super wide, wide, tight, and super tight. This will really help you vary your shots and avoid jump cuts!

Judge 3

Positives: The nat sound works really well--hearing the hammering, drilling and sawing helped painted a fuller picture of the story. Additionally, I really enjoyed seeing the variety of broll--the shots didn't linger too long nor did they repeat, which kept the piece interesting to watch.

Improvements: The overall story could be improved - I didn't understand why I was watching this until the very end, so I would've appreciated a bite in the beginning as to what the class was about/why it is important. The pacing of the piece could've also been improved. The interview bites became repetitive and could've benefitted with some breathing room to allow the bites to sink in.

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