La Grange Holiday Walk - ID# 19
Lyons Township
News Package
Entry Description
This is a news package about the La Grange Holiday Walk, produced by Everardo Garcia and Connor McClanathan.
Copyright Info
Music obtained through the YouTube audio library, under the Attribution Not Required setting.
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/23 6:22 pm - I like that you chose a unique event to your community to highlight. I second the comments below and do not want to be redundant. I do want to encourage you to use a tripod and a light. If you had the two, I think your piece would have done well. It was tough to watch the shaky shots as well as dark silhouetted interview. If you are an underclassman, keep making pieces. If you are a senior, I wish you the best in your future and congratulations!
- 3/16 8:17 pm - I thought your music choice fit well, it was festive, filled the holes where there were breaks in the talking, and it never got in the way of what was being said – it was just there which is exactly what it should do, not stealing the show. The only thing I would have loved to see was that it had a more distinct ending when the piece was over (rather than just fading out). What I suggest to my students is split your music, put the end of the song with the end of your piece and then spice together the cut parts under an interview where no one is really paying much attention to the talking and your audience will never notice the splice. Maybe you did that here and the song just didn’t have a distinct ending, but in case it didn’t that is what I would suggest. When the music and video truly end together I drives that home for the viewer and they are not left wondering if more is coming. Camera work seemed shaky at times not that it can’t move, but it seemed like it moved and wiggled a little more than it should have. Your B-Roll generally fit nicely with what was being said when you were talking about…. The only thing I didn’t like about the B roll is it didn’t always tell the whole story. For example you were talking about how the small shops people go to benefit by all the activity which in turn pumps money back to the community and schools but you never really showed me the small shops you showed me the bubble tea shop, but I never saw what it was called, showcase those exterior signs/shops so I know just exactly what shops you are talking about, not generic shots of people congregating in a store. I thought your interviews were great, they were well coached and told the story you intended, I am guessing because you asked them great well thought out questions. As you move from interview to interview though allow your audience to digest what they heard by throwing in a piece of B roll for a few seconds between the two interviewees. It can be just a piece of B roll that continues to run a little longer after the person is done speaking, or a new piece of broll that sets up what is coming up next. I felt like your story just ended, a short summary, or circle back to the introduction would have helped your audience know it was soon ending. It just kind was over. It needed a conclusion or a “so what” Little bit of stumbling in your opening voice over, everyone does it, but it was just a distracting way to start your piece. You did recover and it moved on from there. Overall not a bad story, just have some stronger B-roll in future stories. Little stumbling at the beginning since it was a voice over clean that up
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