CameronMangan_RadonPSA - ID# 208

Riverside Brookfield

Public Service Announcement

Entry Description

Radon Man spreads the word on how to tackle the issue of radon, by promoting a homeowner to buy a radon test kit, in hopes to prevent the said effects of the gas.

Copyright Info

https://www.audioblocks.com/

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/23 11:40 am - I like your interpretation of the Radonman- he is realistic and I thought his salut at the end was funny! The call the action is clear at the end and I like how you made a point to provide clear visuals of the test kit when you shot this. I also like how you showed the cracks in the basement- this is definitely an informative PSA with clear information for viewers!
• 3/8 7:23 pm - Interesting approach to this and a clear message. How does the kid hear Radonman? He is playing a game with his headphones on. There is a hyphen between "1" and "800" in a phone number.

Judge 1

Positives: The message was clear and concise. The usage of props added to the overall delivery of the piece.

Improvements: A better background music could have been used to match the feeling of the piece. Shots of the basement floor appeared to be blurry. Narration could have been more enthusiastic and the audio did not seem to line up with the movement of the person on screen.

Judge 2

Positives: Writing was straightforward and message was clear. Funny idea. Focus was good and everything was brightly lit.

Improvements: Odd choice of music. Could have had a little more shot variety. VO seemed disconnected from the actor's performance - he could have been more emotive with his eyes or movements.

Judge 3

Positives: The throwback to classic commercials is great. Excellent writing.

Improvements: Camerawork and audio can be improved by utilizing a more dramatic lighting technique. An additional element of style ie, dark, more comedic, etc., would also improve the piece.

Judge 4

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