Marijuana Dispensary - ID# 214

Deerfield

Natural Audio News Package

Entry Description

The village of Deerfield responded to Illinois' recreational marijuana law by voting to allow at least one marijuana dispensary to operate within the city limits starting sometime in 2020.

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Recent Teacher Comments

• 2/24 9:47 am - This is an excellent package. The interview audio is clear, the interview content is very focused on the story being told. The b-roll is stunning. Interview camera work and lighting is mostly strong; the mayor's interview could have used a little better lighting. Your editing is very evenly paced.
• 2/22 5:36 am - Hitting a sound bite with audio only at 0:00 is understandable in a natsot piece. Bringing up the bite’s video - an office setting - at 0:06 is a visual speed bump that interrupts flow that’s begun. This is going to be a difficult story to tell with visuals. Framing for mayor highlights the green wall more than the objects on the cabinet behind her. Street shots are generic. Second street shot is heavily backlit; needs more iris. Good framing on third bite. Overall, the streetscapes failed to tell the story for a topic that’s extremely challenging to visualize. And for a natsot package, there were no natsot breaks; the street audio was inconsistent. All interviews were steady with good audio.

Judge 1

Positives: I like how you started the story with a visual and natural sound, it sets the tone of the story. Good soundbites about how this will change Deerfield.

Improvements: Don't use the same shot in the story twice. Make sure to overshoot story so you don't repeat shots. Too many pan shots. Don't use movement in video unless it is necessary.

Judge 2

Positives: -Great job matching up what the subject was talking about to the video we were seeing. You showed kids when they were referencing teens, streets when referencing the town, etc. Also way to go on having very knowledgeable interview subjects that really moved this story along. -This was a meaty subject to tackle in a nat pkg and i think you did a great job of picking soundbites that told the story simply, and made it clear to understand.

Improvements: Ways to take your pkg to the next level: -This was a nat sound pkg so I was hoping for more nat pops. Great use of the one at the beginning. This was a challenging story subject to turn into an audio piece, so you did well given those constraints. We could've heard a few nat pops though with the streets or the school hallways. That audio in the background could also have been a little higher. -More video. Again, this was a tough subject, but increasing your shot count would really take this to the next level, even if it feels like there's not much b-roll for you to get. You could've used tighter shots of cars or spots around town. You could've used tighter shots in the school hallways. That would also help you cover up times where the interview subjects were talking. Once we see them for a good amount of time when they're first shown, we don't need to see them a ton after that.

Judge 3

Positives: The story idea for this piece is very good--it is timely, and it is something that people definitely want to hear about. Additionally, the use of stock footage worked well as it was needed to tie the visuals to the story.

Improvements: While the story idea was good, the pacing could be improved. This is a lively story, but the piece itself felt very slow. The piece could also be improved by including an interview of a high schooler. This is a piece for high school students, so I want to hear from them as to how this affects them and what they think about it.

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